Birds of Prey sample pg

[GemR]

Hey there, thought I'd show my first pg of a 5 pg sample script I'm working on though this looks like a pin up I promise it's not

[Dean Rankine]

Wow! This is really great, Gem! Even the floor is groovy

[Dean Rankine]

And welcome to the forum BTW!

[maggie]

[GemR]

Thanx,nice to be here,worked hard on this one, usually takes me ages to complete a pg

[bluetoaster]

Pencil looks very nice indeed.
Interested to see how it'll look inked.

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[GemR]

Thanx but it's probably not going to happen as I can't ink to save myself

[Cassandra]

Firstly kudos on doing a Birds of Prey page, I'm such a fan of that series. I love your rendering, you use shadows wonderfully. Next time I suggest trying to centre your figures a little more, or perhaps making them a bit bigger since they are getting a little lost in the background. The details on the floor and ceiling are great too btw!

[Matt Elder]

Some really nice sweet pencils here. Just one thing to be a little careful of is the size of the characters. They feel just a little bit on the small side (unless this page is filled with dialogue). The characters themselves only take up about half the height of the page. The floor looks rather spotless (which maybe they are in some high tech lab but if not), put something on the ground in the foreground. Whether some boxes, loose bits of paper, dripping water / water puddles etc. or something relevant to the scene / story. It will help fill up the space and make it feel less empty. The room interior otherwise looks great and you can tell you've put some time and perspective into it.